I personally think that the lineart looks so comedy, but one thing I feel unimpressed is translation, I mean it's not bad, but it looks weird in my sight as I read a lot of translated manga in here, and there are some misspelling such as threatening (I found threatning), but don't worry, I can understand by the images, just want to suggest translation to make it looks more clean, less mess. Keep uploading I love reading Boy's Love, so I won't miss a chance reading them.

 

(No hate, mark the word 'opinion'.)