I'm sorry tf is this?
So I click on this and right off the bat chapter 1 (says chapter 13 for some reason but it's the first chapter) were instantly shown a girl and a boy in a forest fighting ghosts but then he sucks the ghost (into his eye) but his eyes reminds her of some dude who I feel like we should know but we don't with no explanation after that mess of a story the girl (she's apparently a noble or princess I can't tell which one) and some random a** council of the elderly snobs decides they need to kill her for no reason before she moves north?
I don't like saying stories are bad because if the person who made them read this they'd probably feel unmotivated and discouraged and comments like those are what get people to quit doing this but this is actually horrible
try introducing the characters first and not just starting in what should be the middle of the story (unless someone fuc*** the the chapters which that would not be the authors fault
So I click on this and right off the bat chapter 1 (says chapter 13 for some reason but it's the first chapter) were instantly shown a girl and a boy in a forest fighting ghosts but then he sucks the ghost (into his eye) but his eyes reminds her of some dude who I feel like we should know but we don't with no explanation after that mess of a story the girl (she's apparently a noble or princess I can't tell which one) and some random a** council of the elderly snobs decides they need to kill her for no reason before she moves north?
I don't like saying stories are bad because if the person who made them read this they'd probably feel unmotivated and discouraged and comments like those are what get people to quit doing this but this is actually horrible
try introducing the characters first and not just starting in what should be the middle of the story (unless someone fuc*** the the chapters which that would not be the authors fault
