I do not like deceit and drama getting mixed up in s**. I’m disappointed the author went this route. I like wholesome fun in my po**.
Below is my rant explaining the changes the author could make so that this would be a pleasant read for me. Since I really liked the art, characters, setting and abilities, I was actually disappointed enough to write out this rant.
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Instead of a Lucy getting raped a bit, imagine if Lucy was just mad because an idiot got mana deprivation. And then, instead of forgiving him because he was hallucinating, she forgave him because he had only just learned about magic. Then, instead of him winning the spar sparking her bad boy kink, winning earned her respect as a magician.
Imagine if, instead of trying to force a conversation due to the quest, the MC had gone into that shop because he was curious about the drink the student council president drank so much of in the game. Continue imagining that the MC actually liked the drink, exclaimed as such, and the president started a conversation based on that. Now take it a step further and replace the stalker and scandal with the overworked student council president recruiting the guy with perfect memory. There was no need for any lies for these two to get close.
As for Lumi, the start is fine. There's no reason Lumi can't ask to be s** buddies though. Instead of inventing "secret friends", Lumi can just normally want some di** with a side of friendship. The girl is ho*** and lonely, so there's no need to go to lengths like having the MC invent an interest in her hobbies. They can just be groupmates that meet up for teokbokki and chill every weekend.
Comment by JackJack on Trapped In The Academy's Eroge - Chapter 12
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The overall quest can be changed too. Just make it so that the MC needs to reach an ending, not necessarily the harem ending. Then, since the MC won’t be worried about dying (since the task is hella easy), there won't be a need for the MC to lie and force events. The MC can also totally wind up pounding all six girls despite only needing one route cleared. It's an eroge world, it doesn't take lies and plots for these girls to wind up ho***. It doesn't take secret relationships to say that six girls wanted friends with benefits.
this is just my opinion on your opinions as a weird individual
1. That would kinda frick up him being such a powerful magician
2 that's a bit too much like normal trope plot
3 it feels like he's being a better person if he's liking her hobbies and talking about it with her
4 the MC is a bit of a scumbag. This is a drove game he's in. Who wouldn't try to go all hare
Me being the weird individual not you. Tho we kinda both are
I ain't readin allat but we up no