It coupd have been an interesting idea but killing the old man and pushing the granddautlghter into revenge. Thats wrong. Thats evil. This is bad writing. Terrible writing. Straight trash story. Was an intersting concept could have been good but you not jist terrible at writing you are atrocious at it. Untill you up your writing game you should stay 100 ft from any writing device for the sake of all writing. You are giving writing a bad name. Do better or stop writing. 💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩
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Atop lying to yourself your not an author. Stop putting evil out online. Keep your sick sick sh*t to yourself.
If you likenthis evil sick demented sh*t then thers something wrong with you
You are out of your mind to put this out online. The world never needed this and will never need this. Its cover toccover evil. All you've created is evil. Everything you touch turns to sh*t. You seriously need your head examined for thinking this is okay just because its fiction. That is an invalid defense. Its like saying everyone cheats so why cant i. That doent make it okay or justify it. You are sick becauee what you created is sick demented depraved disgusting disturbing vile evil disease infested filth that helps no one. Pick a different stoey make your own stoey that isnt evil. You aint doing G.o.d's work. You are doing evil you are putting out evil. Reguardless of how you have to pay for this in the afterlife. YOU GET WHAT YOU GIVE YOU REAP WHAT YOU SOW AND YOU ARE SOWING EVIL. SO ITS GOING TO COME BACK AROUND ON YOU. It doesnt matter if you dont believe in karma we ALL have it we all earn it. STOP PUTTING OUT THIS SICK EVIL VILE FILTH. THERS OTHE RSTOIES YOU CAN MAKE OR WHATEVER THERES SOEMTHING YOU CAN DO THAT ISNT THIS. YOU KEEP CHOOSING EVIL AND YOU ARE GOI G TO GET IT BACK IN THIS LIFE AND WHATEVER COMES AFTER.
IF YOU DONT WANT TO BE A PLAYTHIG FOR DEMONS , IF YOU DONT WANT TO GET PASSED AROUND BY DEMONS, IF YOU DONT WANT TO GIVE BRAIN TO DEMONS YOU ARE MAKING THE WRONG DICISION AND WRONG CHOICE. STOP CHOOSING EVIL STOP BEING EVIL. GET HELP. BOTH PROFESSIONAL AND DIVINE. YOU NEED G.O.D AND J.E.S.U.S YOU AINT RIGHT IN THE HEAD. STOP PUTTING OUT THIS EVIL OR DO UOU WAN TTO BE A PLAYTHIG FOR DEMONS. YOU NEED SERIOUS HELP THIS AINT RIGHT AND NEVER SHOULD BE.
Theres something wrong with the person who created this everyone along the way who approved and allowed this and eveyone who yhinks this is a good story. Just by being a stupid braindead dumb story it has lost any value it had as a story and is terrible writing because the premise is disgusting vile demented evil sick depraved.this isnt okay this isnt right this isnt good. You are making serious negative karma for yourself you might want to think about never making anymore of this sick depraved demented evil. You camt seriouslt believe your helping the world helping people to grow. If you think your helping anyone jy putting this outbinto the world you should be locked up forever in a faciliry where you cant reach anyone where you have no internet.
You aint foing the Lord's work. You're NOT. not one bit of this is okay. You NEED serious help. Professional and divine. YOU ARE NOT OKAY IN THE HEAD SPIRIT HEART MIND OR ANYWHERE ELSE. Im not tryjng to be mean or belittle you. But seriously yiu cant think this is okay just because its fiction.
I real life humans and neaderthals were at war. They raided our villages killed the men and used them for food and the woemn for breeding material. Thats real history that teally happened and its NOT OKAY just because it happened in history. Villages were burned in history people were murdered and put i to slavery. Its like defemding cheating or killing because EVERYONE DOES IT ITS COMMON. Thats no defemse either. Just becasue it happened in history or everyone does it is NO DEFENSE. THAT FOESNT JUSTIDY IT BECAUS ETHERE IS NO JUSTIFYING IT. You are sick you need help. Stop putting this out and mayne just maybe you'll avoid being a playthi g for demons in the underworld. Because again this aint the work of the Lord. Its evil you are doing evil. Amd you get what you give so font be surprised when your evil comes back on you in whatever form it takes whenever it does because it will and mayne it will be jothing more than the Lord daying i kniw ye kmnot. Depart from me. You are sick. This is sickness and it NEEDS TO BE STOPPED. NO ONE NEEDS THIS YOU AR EHRLPKNG NO ONE BUT YOURSELF AT THE EXPENSE OF EVWRYONE INCLUDING YOURSELF. you wanma be a plaything of demons you go ahead but stop tryingto bring everyone else down with you. Sto being misery loves company. Stop acting like someone who has a fatal disease and just wa ts infect everyone they can so ghey dont have to fie alone. You NEED SERIOUS SERIOUS HELP BOTH PROFESSIONAL AMD DIVINE. You are not okay and you wont be okay existentially. You are s**g yourself into the underworld and thats your choice but stop tryi gto bring everyone along. We dont want your evil because we dont want evil. So keep your evil to yourself. Yo udidnt have to put this online. You could have kept it to yourself. So you ARE GOING TO PAY FOR THAT in sow way soem how and its probably your afterlife. MAKE NO MISTAKE YOU F'D UP. YOU SH*T THE BED WHEN IT MATTERED MOST. KEEP YOU EVIL TO YOURSELF. WE DO T WANT IT WE DO T NEED IT. YOU AINT HELPING ANYONE. STOP BRING HUMANITY DOWN STOP SELLING US OUT JUST TO LINE YOUR POCKETS. BO NE WANTS THIS NO ONE NEEDS IT. PACK IT IN. YOU CAN WRITE ANYTHINGIT DOESNT HAVE TO BE SICK DEMENTED DEPRAVED DISGUSTING BEAINDEAD GARBAGE. WHAT THE F IS WRONG WITH YOU THAT YOU THINK THIS IS OKAY. YOU ARW GOING TO BE A PLAYTHING FOR DEMONS. STOP NOW WHE. MAYNE THERS A CHANCE YOU CAN AVOID THAT POSSIBLY MAYBE. BUT NO YOU MIST REALLY WANT TO BE A PLAYTHING FOR DEMONS. KEEP YOUR EVIL TO YOURSELF. NO ONE NEEDS IT NO ONE WANTS IT.
You could literally write ANY story but you chose evil dont be surprised when you get it back.yoi get what you give. What goes around comes around. You reap what you sow. So stop sowing evil. U less yiu want to be aplaythi gfor demons. Get help 🙏 both professional and divine. You NEED IT. This isnt okay its not. You sh*t the bed for real. Get prilofessionsl and divine help. You need it.
Tmyou are reveling in and enjoying the abuse you heap on fictional characters. You are evil your crwating is evil beyond evil. Dont ever write again. Do t ever even try. You are abysmal at it. Its not sophosticated its evil 😈. Its not intriguing or cool or fun its demented full evil. You are putting out evil think about your karma. Because you are earni g negative karma and maybe thats a bad idea. Stop bei g evil stop choosing evil stop putting this evil sick shi* out there. NO ONE NEEDS IT YOUR ARENT HELPING ANYONE BUT YOURSELF YOU ARE LINING YOUR POCKETS BY GLORIFYING ABUSE. STOP BEING EVIL. STOP WORKING FOR EVIL. AND MAYBE YOULL AVOID BRING A PLAYTHING FOR DEMONS IN THE AFTERLIFE
SO WHEN DEMONS ARE RAP*ING YOUR EYES OUT AND PASSING YOU AROUND LIKE ITS A CONCERT. KNOW THAT YOU DID THIS TO YOURSELF. ITS YOUR FAULT.
SERIOULSY IF YOU CANT UNDERSTAND THAT MAKING A STORY ABOUT BUILDING A KINGDOM ON RAP*IS EVIL THEN YOU DONT BELONG OUT IN PUBLIC. YES YOU SHOULD BE HELD IN A FACULITY AND ALL YOU EVIL SHOULD NEVER NE ALLOWED OUT. YOU DONT BELONG OUT IN PUBLIC
People are supposed to be able to relax to stories and this is disturbing sick wrong mental insane. In real life there's people that would rather not be alive than be changed especially like that. Not just being a monster like a vampire but even switching genders that might seem fun and exciting to you but you are psychotic you have broken from reality. Somepeople would truly rather not be alive that have that level of change in their lives. You do you and answer to G.O.D and J.E.S.U.S they trolly feel much stronger than I do about it do you think k they will be lenient kind or will they condemn you for your actions your demented writings you could have kept to yourself. But oh no you jylust had to tell the world about your sickness and try to convert them to it. I dont think G.O.D or J.E.S.U.S. Will take kindly to that. I think you have an afterlife of getting passed around by demons giving brain to demons and generally getting violated by demons for eternity. So enjoy. You earned it. Your actions have earned you it.