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Uta
UtaMember·1 year ago
Day 2 of random poems

Silence, Night—
My sun is wrapped in dreams,
Where pearl-bright branches
Gleam above in streams.
 
And on that bough,
A hush begins to ring—
Soft nightingales,
Like stars with folded wings.
 
Their voices spin
Fine threads of silver air,
And weave a veil
To crown her sleeping hair.
 
It cloaks her face,
Her heart, her breath so mild—
So that nothing wakes
My sun, my dreaming child.

i really love this one❤
Idk what to put here~~~

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The Incognito Guy
The Incognito GuyMember·1 year ago
@Uta
The above poem shows
a little girl's life
potrays her wantings and what suffice
her lines do glow
not for show-
wanting to live a simple life
is what the gods owe (gods owe to girl, to give her a simple life)-
to her trying her best to write 
whether the lines are in her sight

i dont know whether its her mind
or an ai generated verse
well, even to get tht u need a prompt rehearsed

@Uta i would like to know
wht made you started to write in poetic flow
was it for expression? or its just a game
well, either be it but both could be same

well, idk what to do
i read mangas everyday
and dont have a to-do
life sucks as the teen's day
when school's gone 
there come holidays
holidays which brought joy when i was child
are now taking up a lot of ma mind
the friends and the village i used to go
are buried deep right out of my window-
a garden full of joy and fun
isnt there cus i live and waste
my precious time instead of 
studying,reading,learning or having fun (in moderate)
before the start of adult phase
Uta
UtaMember·1 year ago
@The Incognito Guy Amazingggg😍
As well, i'm sorry but these poems aren't mine. I mean, i started to write poems not long ago, but they still need a lot of polishing. Though, when they become good enough for display, i' ll put them here, and i would really like to hear your opinion.
So please wait for me!🙂
Uta
UtaMember·1 year ago
@The Incognito Guy Then i will hurry to patch it all up🙂
The Incognito Guy
The Incognito GuyMember·1 year ago
@Uta nah, well the raws can also work and then you can make a new/make it proper afterwards. like you post today, and there's a higher chance for you to make a better one out of it
Uta
UtaMember·1 year ago
@The Incognito Guy  How Do I Weave Emotion in a Song?
I've asked this question far too long—
How do I bare what's deep inside,
And let my soul no longer hide?
 
My spirit sleeps in shadows deep,
Awake it now from dreamless sleep.
Let thunder crack the silent sky,
And teach my heart how to cry.
 
A spark of love—I long to feel,
Something honest, pure, and real.
To flood this hollow, aching shell,
And break the silence where I dwell.
 
O muses watching from above,
Hear my plea, and send me love.
Release your dove, so light, so strong—
And help me finally finish this song.

So here's first song i ever wrote.
It' s sounds old but i like to write this way. You are first to read so please be honest.As well, sorry for not posting, exams got to me.
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